[Penguicon-Concom] Souvenir Book

[Molly Millions]

Really long and huge post about proof reading, editing, and grammar:


We need to decide on some grammar standards. Some things use Programmer
Grammar (PGG) and some use Strunk and White Grammar (S&WG)

PG: Her books have been described as "fashionable", "imaginative", and
"world changing".
S&WG: Her books have been described as "fashionable," "imaginative," and
"world changing."

I think the latter looks a lot prettier. I think the former is a lot
funnier.

Additions are in <>s

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column 2, line 29 "Codak, a webcomic described as a "celebration of science,
death<,> and human folly"

"Looney runs his company, Looney Labs, with his wife, Kristin Looney, and
Alison Frane." This passage is weird because it can be interpreted that he
runs the company with his wife, a woman named Kristin Looney, and a woman
named Alison Frane. All I'd really suggest is dropping the "wife" part and
just say "Kristin Looney and Alison Frane." (I know I wrote it, but
sometimes you miss your own mistakes.)

Catherynne M. Valente is an award winning author. She is the winner of the
Tiptree Award and the Million Writers Award<.> <She> has been nominated for
the Pushcart Prize, the Rhysling and Spectrum Awards, and the World Fantasy
Award.

Column 1, line 4 from the bottom "Descent of Inanna, and Oracles." All of
this is italicised, the word "and" should not be.
Column 1, line 3 from the bottom "Most recently<,> Valente..."
Column 1, line 4 "Cherie Priest <is> a"

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Column 2, line 21 "Midwest" doesn't need to be italicized.

Column 2

"His popular works range from the Twelve Virtues of Rationality to the
Friendly AI Critical Failure Taxable." Are the books "The Twelve..." and
"The Friendly..."? if not, cut the "the"s.


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