[Penguicon-Concom] Souvenir Book

[Dan DeSloover]

Absolutely awesome. Thank you.

Jer wrote:
> Okay, by page number in the lower right (first run through, I'll probably
> go
> again later):
>
> Page 1:
> First column...
> [p3] "at Pcon" should be "at MPCon"
> Second column...
> [p1] "Experts on and the" should be "Experts on the"
> [p2] "All of this non-stop crammed into a three day" should be "All of
> this
> crammed into a three day, non-stop"
> [p2] "decided to attend and certain" should be "decided to attend and are
> certain"
> [p2] "you will have fun, enjoy." should be "you will have fun. Enjoy!"
> Page 3:
> First column...
> [p1] "Got a question, problem or emergency?" should be "Got a question,
> problem, or emergency?"
> [p3] "virtual currency Whuffie" should be "virtual currency, Whuffie"
> [p3] "in his book, Down and Out in the Magic Kingdom" the title should be
> italicized or something.
> [p4] "(Although storage is one of those" is missing its closing
> parenthesis.
> Second column...
> [p3] "and partake of true" should be "and partake in true"
> [p5] "salty, sweet and delicious" should be "salty, sweet, and delicious"
> [p5] "for vegetarians, beverages of" should be "for vegetarians. Beverages
> of"
> [p6] This whole paragraph might need to go, do we know if we're doing this
> for sure?
> [p7] "If" shouldn't be capitalized
> Page 4:
> First column...
> [p1] This single word paragraph should probably be on the previous page
> somehow.
> [p5] "Sunday, 11:00 pm" should be AM
> [p6] "Multiplayer Computer Gaming Room" should say LAN Party somewhere in
> the title.
> [p6] This paragraph is awkward and kinda wrong. Perhaps "The guys at MPCon
> that run the 200+ person frag fest in Ypsilanti--the largest in the
> midwest-- will take over Ballroom B for a ninety-person Bring Your Own
> PC LAN."
> Second column...
> [p2] "for walk-ins who have a Penguicon badge but no wristband." Perhaps
> "for walk-in attendees who don't wish to bring their own PCs."
> [p4] "Kendra Duan ewill" should be "Kendra Duane will"
> Page 7:
> Second column...
> [p2] "safe, sane and discrete." should be "safe, sane, and discrete."
> [p3] This paragraph shouldn't be bulleted.
> Page 8:
> First column...
> [p1] This paragraph should be amended to mention that Consuite beer cannot
> leave the Consuite.
> Page 10:
> Second column...
> [p3] Shouldn't be bulleted
> Page 12:
> Second column...
> "Penguicon 5.0" should be "Penguicon 6.0"
> Page 17:
> Second column...
> [p1] "adult various would later become" should be "adult version would
> later
> become"
> [p1] "She later moved" repetitive of later, maybe "She then moved"
> Page 18:
> Second column...
> Why are we hating on Benjamin Mako Hill... the other GoHs all got their
> own
> page, but he's on Baker's page.
> Page 25:
> Second column...
> [p3] "theatre forced led him into" should have forced struck out or
> "theatre
> forced^H^H^H^H^H^H led him into"
> [p3] Missing a blank like after this paragraph (or, unbold the first words
> of next paragraph).
>
> Overall: Staff page is missing (or is that by design).
>
> Dude, this is awesome, you did a fantastic job. Thank you!
>
>
>
>
> On 4/1/08, Dan DeSloover <zifferent at yahoo.com> wrote:
>>
>> For your proof-reading enjoyment, may I present the almost completed
>> souvenir book.
>>
>> Download here:
>> http://www.zifferent.net/p6/SouvenierBook1.pdf
>>
>> Please, respond with errata and corrections to me at
>> zifferent at yahoo.com.
>> Thank you
>> ----
>> Dan DeSloover
>>
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