[Penguicon-Concom] Souvenir Book

[Jer]

Okay, by page number in the lower right (first run through, I'll probably go
again later):

Page 1:
First column...
[p3] "at Pcon" should be "at MPCon"
Second column...
[p1] "Experts on and the" should be "Experts on the"
[p2] "All of this non-stop crammed into a three day" should be "All of this
crammed into a three day, non-stop"
[p2] "decided to attend and certain" should be "decided to attend and are
certain"
[p2] "you will have fun, enjoy." should be "you will have fun. Enjoy!"
Page 3:
First column...
[p1] "Got a question, problem or emergency?" should be "Got a question,
problem, or emergency?"
[p3] "virtual currency Whuffie" should be "virtual currency, Whuffie"
[p3] "in his book, Down and Out in the Magic Kingdom" the title should be
italicized or something.
[p4] "(Although storage is one of those" is missing its closing parenthesis.
Second column...
[p3] "and partake of true" should be "and partake in true"
[p5] "salty, sweet and delicious" should be "salty, sweet, and delicious"
[p5] "for vegetarians, beverages of" should be "for vegetarians. Beverages
of"
[p6] This whole paragraph might need to go, do we know if we're doing this
for sure?
[p7] "If" shouldn't be capitalized
Page 4:
First column...
[p1] This single word paragraph should probably be on the previous page
somehow.
[p5] "Sunday, 11:00 pm" should be AM
[p6] "Multiplayer Computer Gaming Room" should say LAN Party somewhere in
the title.
[p6] This paragraph is awkward and kinda wrong. Perhaps "The guys at MPCon
that run the 200+ person frag fest in Ypsilanti--the largest in the
midwest-- will take over Ballroom B for a ninety-person Bring Your Own
PC LAN."
Second column...
[p2] "for walk-ins who have a Penguicon badge but no wristband." Perhaps
"for walk-in attendees who don't wish to bring their own PCs."
[p4] "Kendra Duan ewill" should be "Kendra Duane will"
Page 7:
Second column...
[p2] "safe, sane and discrete." should be "safe, sane, and discrete."
[p3] This paragraph shouldn't be bulleted.
Page 8:
First column...
[p1] This paragraph should be amended to mention that Consuite beer cannot
leave the Consuite.
Page 10:
Second column...
[p3] Shouldn't be bulleted
Page 12:
Second column...
"Penguicon 5.0" should be "Penguicon 6.0"
Page 17:
Second column...
[p1] "adult various would later become" should be "adult version would later
become"
[p1] "She later moved" repetitive of later, maybe "She then moved"
Page 18:
Second column...
Why are we hating on Benjamin Mako Hill... the other GoHs all got their own
page, but he's on Baker's page.
Page 25:
Second column...
[p3] "theatre forced led him into" should have forced struck out or "theatre
forced^H^H^H^H^H^H led him into"
[p3] Missing a blank like after this paragraph (or, unbold the first words
of next paragraph).

Overall: Staff page is missing (or is that by design).

Dude, this is awesome, you did a fantastic job. Thank you!




On 4/1/08, Dan DeSloover <zifferent at yahoo.com> wrote:
>
> For your proof-reading enjoyment, may I present the almost completed
> souvenir book.
>
> Download here:
> http://www.zifferent.net/p6/SouvenierBook1.pdf
>
> Please, respond with errata and corrections to me at zifferent at yahoo.com.
> Thank you
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